First of all, I think that you have made an excellent use of signposting. The signposting in the beginning allowed me to know what your presentation will be about. It was clear to see what your presentation is about. I think in overall, you have constructed your speech well. However, one thing I would like to point out is that sometimes you moved on to the next sentence right after finishing the previous sentence. In other words, you didn't rest in the middle of two different sentences. Because of this it was often quite difficult to understand, although your voice was clear. I got the impression that you were shy and nervous, but I'd like to tell you that there is no need to be so, your presentation is well written. Making eye contacts with the audience could help in giving the idea that the speaker and the audience are interacting. Maybe a way to improve your presentation could be to use some body language, for instance signing the numbers with your fingers when talking about the 6 characteristics of false religion.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I think that you have made an excellent use of signposting. The signposting in the beginning allowed me to know what your presentation will be about. It was clear to see what your presentation is about. I think in overall, you have constructed your speech well. However, one thing I would like to point out is that sometimes you moved on to the next sentence right after finishing the previous sentence. In other words, you didn't rest in the middle of two different sentences. Because of this it was often quite difficult to understand, although your voice was clear. I got the impression that you were shy and nervous, but I'd like to tell you that there is no need to be so, your presentation is well written. Making eye contacts with the audience could help in giving the idea that the speaker and the audience are interacting. Maybe a way to improve your presentation could be to use some body language, for instance signing the numbers with your fingers when talking about the 6 characteristics of false religion.
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